Hey everyone,
Welcome back to my blog. In today’s blog I will be sharing another writing but another picture (at the end I will show you my writing ). The story was about a hand holding on a scary cliff. We had to writing a draft one first and then the final.
Hope you enjoy the final.
Here is my writing
My final:
A million years ago in a world called “Mars” (not the real mars), A man was driving until a flashy light appeared and then the man crashed into a big hole that leads into the dark sea. As he woke up and saw a lot of big zombies were swarming him, the man got so scared he ran for his life
He got bitten by the evil king zombie and turned into a zombie. And started barking like a beast , he started glazing at the sea but soon later he started sprinting to the shadowy cliff. He began to climb through the cliff. He walked and saw creepy zombies around him and walked in the dark creepy street and started running at the speed of light soon after he located a nearby house in the middle of the woods.
He spotted an axe on the dirty grass and began to break into the gross house, as he smashed the fragile glass he spotted a wonderful pancake on the table and began to feast . After he finished he heard police cars around the woody house. He began to sprint out the window but the police were there. He was sent to jail for 50 years
Maybe he will escape or not…..
The end.
I hope you guys enjoy the writing have a great weekend.
Bye
Thanks for sharing this story Jherean. You used some great descriptive language to add impact like ‘dark creepy street’, ‘gross house’ and ‘fragile glass’.
Your build up to the climax was great, but then you finished with ‘but the police were there. He was sent to jail for 50 years’.
You missed an opportunity to capture the audience with an exciting climax describing how the police caught the man.
A great effort though.
Nice Jhereand
it really sent chills up my spine⭐